If I don’t brush my TEETH
they will go rotten and smelly.
They will be stinky, revolting teeth.
If I don’t clean my TEETH
they will hurt when I bite something.
It hurts because I don’t clean them.
If I don’t brush my TEETH
they will become rotten and gross.
I don’t want to go to the dentist
people will have to rip them out
I will have to have false TEETH.
I WANT TO LOOK AFTER MY TEETH
Tuesday, November 2, 2010
teeth by Eden
If I don’t brush my TEETH
they will go rotten and smelly.
They will be stinky, revolting teeth.
If I don’t clean my TEETH
they will hurt when I bite something.
It hurts because I don’t clean them.
If I don’t brush my TEETH
they will become rotten and gross.
I don’t want to go to the dentist
people will have to rip them out
I will have to have false TEETH.
I WANT TO LOOK AFTER MY TEETH
they will go rotten and smelly.
They will be stinky, revolting teeth.
If I don’t clean my TEETH
they will hurt when I bite something.
It hurts because I don’t clean them.
If I don’t brush my TEETH
they will become rotten and gross.
I don’t want to go to the dentist
people will have to rip them out
I will have to have false TEETH.
I WANT TO LOOK AFTER MY TEETH
Wednesday, May 12, 2010
Gentle Giant Natalia -part 3
The Gentle Giant
Once long ago there was a Gentle Giant he had a green t-shirt ,blue pants, brown shoes with red and yellow laces and his nose was as shape as a blade and he had blonde curly hair and blue eyes. He is living on a white and sparkly cloud and it shaped like a lollypop. He is living in a brick house with gardens all around his house , they were flower gardens. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things like dinosaurs and any thing you can think of.
The children’s parents liked playing with the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their world Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Can we put a mat under the cloud so the sand drops onto the mat. The mat is helled by 4 invisible pegs that are stuck in the sparkly white cloud. The gentle giant stuck his head threw the cloud to make sure the mat was under the sand pit so it didn’t rain sand again.
Once long ago there was a Gentle Giant he had a green t-shirt ,blue pants, brown shoes with red and yellow laces and his nose was as shape as a blade and he had blonde curly hair and blue eyes. He is living on a white and sparkly cloud and it shaped like a lollypop. He is living in a brick house with gardens all around his house , they were flower gardens. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things like dinosaurs and any thing you can think of.
The children’s parents liked playing with the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their world Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Can we put a mat under the cloud so the sand drops onto the mat. The mat is helled by 4 invisible pegs that are stuck in the sparkly white cloud. The gentle giant stuck his head threw the cloud to make sure the mat was under the sand pit so it didn’t rain sand again.
Brooklyns Gentle Giant.3
Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem. Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms
And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and
Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a
Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob
Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and
It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a
Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and
. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it
rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms
And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and
Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. . He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a
Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob
Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and
It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a
Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and
. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it
rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms
And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and
Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. . He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a
Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob
Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and
It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a
Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and
. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it
rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms
And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and
Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. . He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a
Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob
Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and
It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a
Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and
. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it
rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem. Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms
And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and
Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a
Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob
Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and
It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a
Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and
. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it
rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms
And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and
Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. . He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a
Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob
Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and
It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a
Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and
. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it
rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms
And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and
Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. . He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a
Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob
Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and
It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a
Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and
. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it
rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Once upon a time long ago, there was a Gentle Giant with a friendly,wrinkly smile.He had wonderful spotty arms
And legs.His tummy was stripey and he had little horns on top of his head.The gentle giant has short black hair and
Twinkling green eyes and Orange little shoes.His stripes where green and blue and his spots where black and white. . He was nice and had lots of little friends. He lived on a cloud on a grape vine.It was a greeny colour.There was a pole to get up to his house. He had a
Colourful garden full of flowers. An apple tree was set beside a rose bush. The door was blue. The door knob
Was big and black.It had 2 windows at the top. The
Cloud was fluffy and white that shined in the sun,and
It had Colourful sparkles. The shape looked like a
Smiley Face. It tastes like sugar. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks, Bob Cats and
. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it
rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
Monday, May 10, 2010
Feedback guidelines
We have begun uploading our stories. Could you please make comments about our descriptive writing. Can you picture our settings (the house on the cloud) and our character (The Gentle Giant). If not could you please make some suggestions that will help improve our stories and bring them to life. Please don't worry about our spelling as we will be working on this in our editing time in the classroom.
Thank you for your help.
Thank you for your help.
Wednesday, May 5, 2010
gentle giant - ashleigh
A long long time ago there was asmart Gentle Giant living on astorm cloud in a House.she was nice and had lots ofnice little friends.
She had flat hair and her eyes shined like a star and her coler was vialet her house was made of candy and theguardswere dragons
The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When hercool friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in itthe sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got madbecause their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow.now The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but she likedit better outside in the sunshine. sheneeded to work out how to fix the problem.
She had flat hair and her eyes shined like a star and her coler was vialet her house was made of candy and theguardswere dragons
The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When hercool friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in itthe sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got madbecause their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow.now The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but she likedit better outside in the sunshine. sheneeded to work out how to fix the problem.
Thursday, April 29, 2010
Gentle Giant - Lori - part 2
The Gentle Giant Once upon a time there was a fat Gentle Giant wifi popil spikes on his bake living on a cloud in a house. He was is nice and had lots of little friends.he is aThe Gentle Giant when pepl be nice to him and he a red nose old wood house with broken windows and spiders every where. had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line. The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
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